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| Dave simultaneously screamed and vomited. |
....which should be physically impossible for a human. Although Dave had enough sense to scarper from the slimy-cybernetic-amorphous-tentacular blob of jism that had just perforated his girlfriend, he later died from a nasty lung infection.
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| Back when my grammar and spelling didn't suck, I used to enjoy writing. |
How can your spelling and grammar get worse over time? I didn't think they were really the sort of skills you lose...
Besides, your spelling and grammar seem pretty good to me. Granted, there are mistakes in your writing, but they're fairly minor 
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Hmm, I'm sorry I sort of missed this thread. To be honest I don't like the prologue you have written. I like Juim's version the best, as it gives a sense of suspense without relying on horror.
In terms of how you write I don't think you should be taking anyones advice on that. If it works for you to be highly organized with a detailed outline; great, but if not, don't let people tell you that you need it. The biggest obsticale to writing a full length book is not talent, it is the sheer size of the undertaking. You need to find an organizational style that works for you and go with it. Outlining characters is a good idea, but if you cannot work that way it is useless to you.
I find myself incapable of creating a detailed outline, but also in need of a stark skelatal framework with which to guide myself. this includes the gerneral direction things are going but does not include any of the more personal twists.
Somthing I find myself somewhat weak on is characterization, and this truely is the life of a story. There are books that can get along without it, but for the most part, it does not matter what the story is if your characters are flat and uninteresting. A good exercise I have found for improoveing these skills is to write little bits about random people you see in your life. if you see someone with an interesting face, make up a paragraph about that individual. It's both educational and entertaining so you have nothing to lose
Good luck
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| I chose the name Casey because I needed a person who would be brave enough to actually follow the trail of blood into the cave. Jaimie was just a random name, but that's only because I did not need her character's name to have a meaning, since her purpose was to die. |
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Names don't define people, the way you create the characters defines people. 'Casey' is going to be no more brave than if you replace the name with 'Raoul.' |
unless of course, you're eating him 
/runs from onslaught crowd who hates poor jokes no one understands
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| ? posted by KungFuSquirrel |
| Names don't define people, the way you create the characters defines people. 'Casey' is going to be no more brave than if you replace the name with 'Raoul.' |
Generally true; certainly names cannot by themselves create a character. However, names can have significance: consider "Winston Smith" in Orwell's 1984.
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)thanks, I laughed coffee into my nose.(
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)thanks, I laughed coffee into my nose.( |
only cause i truly care ol' man
