It's not "awful" Wild Card, the English is mostly fine and accurate - BUT, at the moment it seems to be an awful lot of history of computing and not a lot of explanation - especially for someone who doesn't know about computers!
If you rehashed it as a "history of computing" article, it would work "better" in my eyes
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Wild Card on Sun Feb 27th at 11:30pm 2005
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Posted by Wild Card on Sun Feb 27th at 11:30pm 2005
Well my introduction was more historical than not. And every
section I started with a bit of history, from what I know. Which
could be wrong. But as I go deeper, I focus mainly on the
technical aspects.
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:33pm 2005
Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:33pm 2005
I think what he's saying is that, people wont get that far ... I didn't.
Also, I don't think this paper will be 25 pages if you let someone help edit. It'll probably boil down to 12 VERY good pages. [addsig]
Also, I don't think this paper will be 25 pages if you let someone help edit. It'll probably boil down to 12 VERY good pages. [addsig]
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Posted by Wild Card on Sun Feb 27th at 11:36pm 2005
I dont mind that. So long as it doesnt cut out any technical content. I mean, sure I have some stuff I could eliminate, such as the ENIAC stuff, comparing it to modern computers, but still. Like the whole HDD section is I think about 5 pages, but 5 pages of important stuff.
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Posted by Wild Card on Sun Feb 27th at 11:36pm 2005
? quote:
Also, I don't think this paper will be 25 pages if you let
someone help edit. It'll probably boil down to 12 VERY good pages.
I dont mind that. So long as it doesnt cut out any technical content. I mean, sure I have some stuff I could eliminate, such as the ENIAC stuff, comparing it to modern computers, but still. Like the whole HDD section is I think about 5 pages, but 5 pages of important stuff.
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:40pm 2005
I dont mind that. So long as it doesnt cut out any technical
content. I mean, sure I have some stuff I could eliminate, such
as the ENIAC stuff, comparing it to modern computers, but still.
Like the whole HDD section is I think about 5 pages, but 5 pages of
important stuff.
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Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:40pm 2005
? quote:
? quote:
Also, I don't think this paper will be 25 pages if you let
someone help edit. It'll probably boil down to 12 VERY good pages.
someone help edit. It'll probably boil down to 12 VERY good pages.
I dont mind that. So long as it doesnt cut out any technical
content. I mean, sure I have some stuff I could eliminate, such
as the ENIAC stuff, comparing it to modern computers, but still.
Like the whole HDD section is I think about 5 pages, but 5 pages of
important stuff.
We'll see ... I'll comment in a little while. [addsig]
Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Gwil on Sun Feb 27th at 11:41pm 2005
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Posted by Gwil on Sun Feb 27th at 11:41pm 2005
Exactly 
It won't be for a few days, and expect liberal use of the red marker, but there are bits that can be chopped altogether. I'm happy to help, but be prepared to see it shrink down - and I won't cut out anything technical, just shave off the waffling
As Crono says, it could be a really clear and concise 10-15 pages with a few hours of editing
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It won't be for a few days, and expect liberal use of the red marker, but there are bits that can be chopped altogether. I'm happy to help, but be prepared to see it shrink down - and I won't cut out anything technical, just shave off the waffling
As Crono says, it could be a really clear and concise 10-15 pages with a few hours of editing
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:58pm 2005
Posted by Crono on Sun Feb 27th at 11:58pm 2005
The slowest component in a computer is the CD or FDD. Not the HDD. Granted, when talking about "permanent" stuff it is the slowest. Damn those moving parts!
More then just Seagate's drives go at 15,000 RPM.
One thing I think would be good is stick to metric or imperial, don't switch back and forth.
Typical HDDs have TENS of thousands, not just thousands of tracks.
You talk about the formatting process, yet you don't mention the overstock of cylinders that's in every HDD. Since cylinders go bad, there are back ups. (Also, meaning that your drive is technically much larger then it says it is.)
I can't take anymore ... sorry.
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More then just Seagate's drives go at 15,000 RPM.
One thing I think would be good is stick to metric or imperial, don't switch back and forth.
Typical HDDs have TENS of thousands, not just thousands of tracks.
You talk about the formatting process, yet you don't mention the overstock of cylinders that's in every HDD. Since cylinders go bad, there are back ups. (Also, meaning that your drive is technically much larger then it says it is.)
I can't take anymore ... sorry.
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Wild Card on Mon Feb 28th at 12:26am 2005
Did I say it was the HDD? Er... oops
One thing I think would be good is stick to metric or imperial, don't switch back and forth.
I try not to, but its like talking about distances and hights. I walked 2 kilometers today, and I am 5 feet 8 inches tall. I say it like that, because here, thats the way it is. But yea, if you can point out some really bad examples...
Typical HDDs have TENS of thousands, not just thousands of tracks.
Guess I should fix that, I didnt know the exact number.
You talk about the formatting process, yet you don't mention the overstock of cylinders that's in every HDD. Since cylinders go bad, there are back ups. (Also, meaning that your drive is technically much larger then it says it is.)
Didnt know a thing about that!
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Posted by Wild Card on Mon Feb 28th at 12:26am 2005
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The slowest component in a computer is the CD or FDD. Not the
HDD. Granted, when talking about "permanent" stuff it is the slowest.
Damn those moving parts!
Did I say it was the HDD? Er... oops
? quote:
One thing I think would be good is stick to metric or imperial, don't switch back and forth.
I try not to, but its like talking about distances and hights. I walked 2 kilometers today, and I am 5 feet 8 inches tall. I say it like that, because here, thats the way it is. But yea, if you can point out some really bad examples...
? quote:
Typical HDDs have TENS of thousands, not just thousands of tracks.
Guess I should fix that, I didnt know the exact number.
? quote:
You talk about the formatting process, yet you don't mention the overstock of cylinders that's in every HDD. Since cylinders go bad, there are back ups. (Also, meaning that your drive is technically much larger then it says it is.)
Didnt know a thing about that!
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Re: Care to rate my article on computer hardware?
Posted by Crono on Mon Feb 28th at 12:58am 2005
Posted by Crono on Mon Feb 28th at 12:58am 2005
The cylinder thing is what that quote I gave you was about.
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