I'm compiling now, it'll be about an hour, but you'll see me on Steam. I'll update the file when it's done so you can either join my server or just test it out on your own. If you would be so kind as to either give feedback here or send informative critiques to gorb@shaw.ca that would be great. If a part isn't right, don't just say it's wrong, tell me why and a suggestion you have. Thanks.

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O.K. considering i know nada about the game play involved with a DoD map, i will try my damnedest to stick strictly to the cosmetics and such involved with the design, and construction of the map.. also, if i repeated any comments already posted, mark it up as my own laziness to not reading all the preceding replies..

Now this is basically a pet peeve of mine, and basically consistent throughout the entire map.. 1st off, alignment issues.. which are obvious, and prolly already mentioned so much gorby is tired of hearing it, but the only reason i bring it up at all is.. the walls.. are all standing, but there are no buttresses anyplace, no end, nor beginnings, no posts, nada.. the walls are just standing.. it always seemed to me to be odd where walls have nothing actually holding them up.. at least each time they actually change direction.. but as i said, its a pet peeve, and strictly up to the author.

another bit of trivial commentary.. you can see behind this house, but cannot walk behind it.. if there were a fence, you could understand, or with other locales in the map, a tree has fallen to block the way, but here its open.. and i assume clipped off

another wall, misaligned, and nothing in the way of transition between its changes in direction

two doors, same house, one on floor, the other standing, but on the sunlit side of the house.. func_doors do not block light when compiling, the light on the floor looks odd at best.. my advice.. switch doors locations with each other.

this table, may have a purpose i dunno, but it needs some broken chairs or boxes to sit on, also for all the debris, the handrails are almost all whole.. looks odd IMO

dark, really dark.. screens are unaltered, so i dunno if its my PC, or the map.. or the authors intention.. more people need to look to get a consensus i suppose.

beautifully flowing water to..... no place .. some sort of a drain, or outlet needs added for authenticity.

these three shots, all of the same area.. show a HOM effect.. prolly due to some clipping of the angles.. an invalid solid might be around close

although a nice touch most times, in this case, i feel the body under the rocks is out of place, the body has no obvious damage, no blood, its just.. there

logs undamaged as well.. need some smut covered logs instead..

car against wall = bad ... at the very least, set it at some sort of an odd angle, or damage it in some way????

for all the rubble, there is no smoke, no dust.. everything looks as if its been vacuumed spotless.. in fact the whole town looks like Mr. Clean made a house call.. the town has damage, but is so pristine, no burnt treetops (although a few are on their sides, but even these still retain leaves, something not normal for fallen timber ) no real battle damage at all..

toss a grenade into the water.. the effects are impressive

more dark tunnels, and nothing holding the roofs up.. /me wonders, if battles were present before they were dug

a hole in the wall?? intentional though i doubt it to be.. it definitely marks the tunnel entrance behind the bush

climb the wall, and you see this

i am totally cognizant of the notion, that i more than likely missed a s**t load of details, i got turned around several times, just acquiring these few screen shots, and i also realize that almost all of my comments focus on the issues that need attended to, this is no reflection on the map, or gorby's mapping ability.. this is a superb map in all respects, and if i really needed to, i could get just as many screen shots of the great areas.. but since critiques should not have to focus on what doesn't need fixed, it would only take up space.. gorby knows his work is superior to most, he doesn't need my verification to make it so..

nice map gorby, and i cannot wait to look it over in beta form..

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Very nice Jon, was going to take a run through this myself when I got some time.

thanx dave, turned out pretty good for my debut return if i do sayso myself

i am so glad you liked it.. understandably, i am a bit gun-shy when doing critiques anymore.. i never know how far to push the truth.. sadly, i wish i didn't have to think about that aspect at all.

if you like, i can do one more critique of the "finished" works.. prior to release, all you need do is ask.. assuming i am home or you have time to wait for me to get home..

good luck gorby

I'm aware, but then it looks stupid when the door is open. It's bad either way.

Orph, I'll be thinking hard on what a good outlet can be...actually, I have a pretty good one, I'll make a stone surrounded drain, with a grate. Then have the water going into that, and as a touch of continuity I'll have it flowing down visibly in the tunnels (a little side detail sort of thing).