1. I'll try. Hope no one cares about r_speeds!
2. Thanks! One of those rare moments of genius I guess, as it wasn't planned.
3. ![]()
4. I'll get rid of that.
4A. Thanks!
5. I'll change that thing around a little bit to add detail. A red light is a good idea too.
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7. I'll fix that too.
8. I wanted to allow people to go through that one. I'd change the texture to differentiate, but there aren't many other options in the xen.wad
9. I'm going to have to remake that thing to make it look cooler than a 6 sided brush.
10. What's wrong with a little subtle detail ![]()
11. I don't know...
12. ouch
13. That's just a cycler_wreckage. I haven't quite figured out if I can change it but I'll try...
Thanks for the critique. I appreciate it ![]()
Posted by 7dk2h4md720ih on Thu Aug 5th 2004 at 1:28am
1. This roofline is still a bit flat. At the very least put something behind it.

2. This bit kicks ass and chews bubblegum but then it ran out of bubble gum and stole some from a well lit but dead soldier but it was too busy kicking ass to chew properly. True story.

3. That yellow light has gone horribly wrong. Open hammer, select the texture and press the 'fit' button. I can make a tutorial if you want.

4. Inexplicable texture transition. Why does the floor magically change colour?

4. These are really cool.

5. I'd give this a bit more depth and maybe add a small red light near it.

6. Ooh baby.

7. These lights don't looks right at all due to having the trim texture on the sides.

8. You can jump through this giant spagetti tangle but you can't get past any other ones I tried.

9. This is a just a tad too large. Scale it down a smidge!

10. Raise this wall up by about 64 units as you can't see that much of it from below.

11. What were you thinking?

12. Reno made me do this so his map would win.


13. The smoke here is a bit thick. Thin it out or have it rise higher into the air.

Overall the map is great but to be honest it's a little dirty and messy in places. You could have at least swept all the rubble into one corner. I won't even start on all the goop lying around. I wish I could find more wrong with it, but I couldn't. I'll have another run around at a later stage though.
Critique away!
http://yak_fighter.tripod.com/reclamation_beta5.zip
Some things to remember as you're running around:
-layout isn't complete, since I haven't made a bunch of connecting hallways
-most of these hallways are there only as visblockers, I really hate hallways myself :
-the dead grunts on the ground are there to show how the lighting will play on entities
-my gamma is set at a little over half on the slidy bar in steam
-the tank area is getting changed
-r_speeds are no worry at this point
Posted by ReNo on Tue Aug 3rd 2004 at 3:00pm
Doesn't look way too bright to me mate, I reckon it could use more light
The central expanse of floor seems to be lacking any sort of illumination judging from the screenshots. While there are loads of nice accenting light fixtures, there is a real lack of functional lighting I'd say. Perhaps a nice arrangement of light spots on the floor could look good.
I'd be interested in doing a critique if you want - PM me a link or tell me to go to hell, your call ![]()
Here's the final area. It's not completed and is way too bright, but eh. I've got a lot of work to do to finish by the deadline, but here's hoping!
Posted by Ferret on Tue Aug 3rd 2004 at 3:57am
Wow! Very nice job!!! I love the Xen vines. Nice job with that. The blue and yellow lighting is good contrasts! You're doing a wonderful job with this map, can't wait to see it finisehd.
Posted by Crackerjack on Thu Jul 29th 2004 at 12:46am
An idea for lighting up the rubble area: Have a construction looking like (one on a stand) so it looks like they were trying to clean it up. And lighting should be alot better in that area.
As for the new screens, the hallways look a bit boring, but that maybe due to your R's not sure. The arched area looks real nice.. maybe some alpha textures for detail?
[addsig]
Posted by ReNo on Wed Jul 28th 2004 at 3:29pm
I going on the basis that the view models are barely lit, and therefore other player models will barely be lit, making the game probably very hard to play. I'm all for keeping the sky lighting blue, but if you are going to have that then you shouldn't rely on it it alone to light up areas, as that tone of blue isn't great as functional lighting. Atmospheric yes, good for playing in, I doubt it. [addsig]

