dm_factor

here you go

http://kokosovar.free.fr/mapshl/factors1.jpg

http://kokosovar.free.fr/mapshl/factors2.jpg

http://kokosovar.free.fr/mapshl/factors3.jpg

http://kokosovar.free.fr/mapshl/factor.zip

Screenshots please. And put a better description.

Looks okay, but you're a terrible screenshot photographer. Give us clearer shots of the map.

You will get more idea's and things to do and fix if you supply the screens.

overall the map looks good. But wary the textrues, it the same color texture through out the map.

I like the buildings, but the textures and outdoors are kinda bland.

i like the atmosphere, but you can see the transition between your vertical sky"walls" and the sky"ceiling"

(Only checked out the screens so far)

Looks quite nicely built but is very grey. Changing some of the textures to those with a bit more colour would help a lot.

Also, the boundary walls are very straight along the entire length. Maybe think about adding a few recesses and other interesting features.

I've played it, and it's really quite boring! The outdoor area does look good and gives a great impression of being hot and barren. However the interiors really let it down- the windows are really too small to be useful, the rooms inside are usually just boxes with a few props and badly placed VIS-blocking wall, and the tall building with the ladder just doesn't work! (talking of which, most of your ladders don't work very well at all, especially the one leading to the RPG, which has quite fiddly little platforms to get to). Also, I didn't quite understand who'd put those huge concrete tubes on the roof, and what you can do with them?!

All in all, this could be quite fun if the buildings were redesigned- the exteriors look fine, but the interiors are just crap :wink:

The skybox buildings also seem to be larger than they should be, though they do look good otherwise. Also scale down the sand texture outside the level.

thanks for comments guys

Your map reminds me a little bit of "bouncex" for HL1. Try and
track down that map and see how the interiors were done because they
were done well.