dm_veikko

I really like the clean shadows in the third picture, but the blood stain in the light in the second picture, while artistic, seems too perfectly centered in the light. I'd either move/rotate the decal or shift the light or make it a bit weaker and fuzzier around the edges.

Yeah, that was from the original, never did move it. i may turn it into an overlay and rotate it. as for the huge room with shadows, what do you think of this screen instead?

http://www.freepgs.com/ishbog/veikko/dm_veikko0465.jpg

this is the first map ive ever made. snarkpit page:

http://www.snarkpit.net/maps.php?map=1946

screenshots:

http://www.freepgs.com/ishbog/veikko/

ill post more, but i have to go to class. tell me what you think!

Great looking map. I like (for the most part) how it fit together. Also, the mood and lighting were well done.

As for the review:



Grass prop hanging over the edge.



Alot of your door ways and windows lacked any kind of trim. When
two diffrent textures meet at an edge it can look very tacky, try to
add some more detail brushes.



This is a big issue to me, the skybox. This shot is showing me
toss an explosive barrle out the sky light. It hits the skybox
and blows up, and that looks horrible. remeber always make your
sky box very high so props dont run into it, you can always use a hint
brush to to cut down the vis leaf.



This place just didn't feel right, just looks like a bunch of props slapped together.



That prop isn't a spot light, it should be casting light all around it, not just down.



Use env_sprite and not env_light_glow for small lights like this one
(near the room with the gas pipe) env_light_glow fades as you get
closer to the origin, which looks very strange becuase light halo's
dont tend to do that in real life.



I dont think that charger should be there.



Your lift stops a bit short, I would try and figure out a way to get some doors in there so you dont see the lift.

Very nice, though there may be some game play issues I though that the
map fit together very well and apart from some visual flaws looks very
nice.

I so love to see a map "Orphinated" :heee:

@ Ishbog, and I do not think you are allowed to hotlink your images from that site. They all seem to lead to dead links :sad:

They work fine for me?
Nice map!

Habboi, I think Orph means if you click the links provided in the
snarkpit profile they don't work. They work if you visit the URL he
provided though.

Map looks really impressive for a first effort - refreshing to see
somebody new coming along that obviously put time and effort into their
first release. Good job :smile:

well, about everything changed. from the big room to the tunnels... i made alot of archetectural changes. especially that end of the tunnel with the bright light... damn. its great better now.. wow, talk about bad grammar.

the archetexture in the large room includes dirty, industrial glass in the skylights.

(note: im at a school in japan at the moment, and this keyboard sucks...)

theres so much to tell... download and play this build! its linked on the map page, or at the top of this thread i think. screenshots are in that folder, too. not sure if they are up to date....

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If animals weren't meant to be eaten, then they wouldn't be so delicious and easy to catch!

Face it: if crime didn't pay, there would be very few criminals.

Are you saying you have a new version uploaded now?

I play the old version via LAN all the time, this map looks odd, but it frags very damned well.. it is one of my favored LAN maps.. My son and I play it every weekend :smile:

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The best things in life, aren't things.

Very nice map! I was expecting something odd and out over place every room, but not so! It really works well!

You have the fire's flags in the van set to drop ( not not drop...)
Could you do some stuff extra with the pipes in the tunnel rooms
(IYKWIM)? Make then lead somewhere or reward the person with more then
just a shotgun....

faints*woken up by japanese chick that says ive been laying unconcious in this internet booth racking up 20,000 yen in time, and that they are closing*

dudes, id played this at lan partys before, and knew it played well, etc, but id never heard anyone i didnt personally know say it worked good. thats.... really cool. my main concern in making the map, anyway, was gameplay. fast paced, frag-your-ass now action. cool, it worked.

yes, there has been (consistantly playing, snif) a new bsp for about a month now. no updates in that time, cause im in japan now.

btw, the large large large room is a loooooottttt different, athestically(damn, that spelling sucks), but plays better. and some other gameplay things, like cars killing the elevator, have been worked out. ive still got a few things to change before i put it on the front page.... but im in japan sigh.

as for the tunnels pipes thing, thats a decent idea. anything more specific, or ideal? like maybe having a hatchway taking you to one of the rooms that already exsists? or maybe making a dropout in a different area, so it would be 1-way? ideas?

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www.nysteo.com

If animals weren't meant to be eaten, then they wouldn't be so delicious and easy to catch!

Face it: if crime didn't pay, there would be very few criminals.

You dumb s**t, check your PM's :biggrin:

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The best things in life, aren't things.

OH. MY. GOD. curls up in chair and gasps for air

i cant beleive it. i was going to refine it and submit it for that.... i didnt even have to. im honored. DAMN. that kicks almost too much ass.... wow.

read my post in map suggestions. jeez, thankyou. wow. i havnt logged in for a few days, stupid japanese comps. wow. i actually did it.

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www.nysteo.com

If animals weren't meant to be eaten, then they wouldn't be so delicious and easy to catch!

Face it: if crime didn't pay, there would be very few criminals.

Can we get some screenshots?

I was the Admin whom opted to add this one to the server.. So far, I have received no complaints about doing so.. Since Snarkpit rarely misses a chance to inform me of my errors, I see this as a good sign..

Nice map.. Looks odd but plays well..

The download no longer works

This is true. my web host had a fire last last week, it should be up again soon. it sucks!